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Yet another tangled literary spiral of introspection
as I furiously try to hide my true words
in veils and skeins of prosey poetry
Run up the flags of intellectual superiority
He's such a good writer
look at these words

and I want you to read it
and I know that you'll read it
and the challenge is to bury the message
just enough so that I can convince myself
that maybe you understood me
and maybe you didn't
but in my dreams you'll come running to me with shining eyes
and no words will need to be said, because you understood all I wrote
and we'll tear all our clothes off right then and there

so enough of this gay banter
the reasons why I can't say
I love you
are so deep seated I've even lost sight of them myself.
(and I wonder if they're even there at all)

ONCE MORE INTO THE BREECH, MY FRIENDS
Though the last sortie was repulsed at the gates
With words so sweet I couldn't fight back
I ready myself for another attack
to capture your smile.
©2009-2010 =ProfessorM
:iconprofessorm:

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oh lawd why do I do this to myself

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:iconmidnight-aristocrat:
There's two 'alls' at 'We'll tear all our clothes off'. Aside from that, I thought it was very romantic. :)
Have to say, I'm very familiar with the whole 'flags of intellectual superiority' comment.
Nice poem, prof.

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"Why do you fight? For Love? For Hate? For Power? For Allegiance? For Revenge? For Dream? For Justice? For Sin? For Destiny? The world is full of fighting."
:iconprofessorm:
Thats what you get for commenting as I edit D:
:iconmippins:
Aw, I love it. :heart: It's such an unorthodox take on a love poem, which is what makes it awesome. xD

I think all writers can relate to this, though. At least I can. We all try to pour a little bit of ourselves into our work in hopes of someone understanding the deeper meaning. Just maybe. :) Well done.
:iconmidnight-aristocrat:
D: </3 *fail* SORRY! It was still really nice though. :< I like the sea of big-kid words. ^^

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"Why do you fight? For Love? For Hate? For Power? For Allegiance? For Revenge? For Dream? For Justice? For Sin? For Destiny? The world is full of fighting."
:icongreennite:
Very nice. It's like someone took a regular love poem and decided to throw in some good ole' TESTOSTERONE! :iconhardcoreplz:

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Semper optime, etiam spes absentis.

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"Two days after this is over, I'm going to McDonalds completely naked and I don't care what ANYBODY says because WE JUST FOUGHT OFF FUCKING ZOMBIES"
:iconnemo1000:
Haha, it was good. It was great that I was actually smiling when I reached the end where it said to capture your smile. Really enjoyed.

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Decide that you want it more than you are afraid of it
:icontenyosciurus:
My applause be unto you. ^-^

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“The wireless telegraph is not difficult to understand. The ordinary telegraph is like a very long cat. You pull the tail in New York, and it meows in Los Angeles. The wireless is the same, only without the cat." --Albert Einstein
:iconsepet-dalv:
I'm impressed. I would have to agree with some of my fellow commentators, it is quite the original take on the art of love poetry. I've rarely heard the true intent of love poems expressed so frankly.
The Kakutasu is quite the noble flower.
:iconjemu-katana:
Amazingly written - had to fave :)

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"This is my timey-wimey detector. It goes ding when there's stuff." 10th Doctor Who, Weeping Angels.

"I'm a leaf on the wind, watch how I soar." Wash, Serenity (movie based on the Firefly series).

"Save the cheerleader, save the world." Hiro, Heroes

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